Susan
The Amazing Adventures of Sara Corel
A novel by Toomey


Comments on the Interlude
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Jecel Assumpcao Jr.

        Your story had several things going against it, for my taste, yet managed to come out on top:
        - I don't like dream stories or parallel universes. Fiction is already a parallel universe and I see no need to add another. But it worked great in your story, for Sara's nature made it into something way more serious than, for example, in the Wizard of Oz. Speaking of Oz, the great lengths through which you went to to set up the joke with the 'Little People' shows you think a lot like me. I don't know if that is a good thing :-)
        - Most crossovers on the internet are really bad, as you said. But there are a few good ones where the spirit of both sources are respected, and this story really does this. Of course, if you notice the names of my machines on my home page you will see that I am partial to a crossover with 'Middle Earth'
        - I am not a big fan of, "There is no way to win this, so let's blow everything up," endings. I didn't like it in the Return to the Planet of the Apes nor in Silent Running (two 70s SF films). And you had this twice - in 'Muriah' and then the whole of 'Midgarde'. In both cases it made a lot more sense than this normally does, but especially the end wasn't very satisfying (though it was obviously expected by 'Gundolf' and the Elves). Sara could have blown everything up in the first minute. Of course I understand that this was a learning experience for her, and only after she had gone through all of that would she know that this was the solution, so I guess I don't really have anything to complain about. It is just a pity that she ended up following the Jabberwauk's example.
        I really liked the characterizations of the people she met, especially 'Gundolf'. And the way everyone spoke very formally while she came across as a Texas teenager in every language was great!
        I lived the first half of the 70s in the US, and the second half in Brazil where a dictatorship which had exchanged freedom for progress was trying to hold on to power (they managed to stretch it until 1985, though I bet they are very sorry that they did). So the confrontation between Sara and the suited CEOs has a special meaning for me.
        My experience probably led me to a very different viewpoint about freedom than yours. I have found out that most people don't mind it as long as it isn't too much of a bother. A lot of people don't find it particularly useful, as they have no idea what to do with it (and this includes, unfortunately, people who spend their whole lives fighting for it).
        In a situation like your 'Little People' were going through, some people would rebel and be eliminated. A few others would think like the first group, but speak otherwise out of fear. But most would 'get along' and not think twice about it.
        The US was very lucky to have people like Thomas Jefferson setting the country's direction when it was created. But while most of the people and their current leaders speak the right words, I don't think they have a clue about what it all means.
        Thanks for a really great story.

-Jecel

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